recession obsession

[sarafinamable]

i pull myself a w a y from you
because you are slowly f a d i n g from

s i g h t

buried in these words
with eyes aglow
from computer "fire"

i almost hate myself because you are not who i thought

maybe its crazy talk because i know its

late

and my eyes are big, awake with

sleeplessness

but emotions are raw and i need you now
so why are you f a d i n g from

s i g h t


and why do i p u l l myself

a w a y?


the truth is that you could hurt me
you might not choose me
you might not want me

it is not the early hour or the flourencent lights it is not crazy talk this time

emotions are bleeding and i need you now
but i p u l l myself a w a y

because you are f a d i n g
from
s i g h t


"All in all it's just another brick in the wall" Pink Floyd




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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer

[Hannibal]

I LOVED the spacing on those words.
Added a lot to the poem.
This poem seemed full. I really liked this peice.
*nods*

What did computers have to do with it?
e-mail?
messenger?
I wouldn't mind the story behind this one...
*sits*


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As miserable as life may be I hold it pretty precious...

If I lose the light of the sun, I will write by candlelight, moonlight, no light. If I lose paper and ink, I wil write in blood on forgotten walls. I will write always, I will capture nights all over the world and bring them to you.
Word And Voice
Motocross Fanatics
General Philosophy

[sarafinamable]

thankyou, it is such a great feeling when someone responds positively to things that i generally keep to myself. this is the first place i have posted any of my writing and i love it.
i guess i added the c omputer glow in b/c it was 4am and i was at the point where i was incredibly tired but my eyes were glued open and dry from the computer glow.
and its usually at this time (so early/late) when the body needs sleep but fights it off that i can't tell if the things i'm feeling are real or if it's just my mind making dramatics so i stop doing my work.
i was in the middle of a huge paper and i just started thinking about a lot of things (distracting myself really) and thats when i wrote this.
i wasn't sure if it was the fact that i was alone in the computer lab, or that i'd been staring at a moniter glow for 5 hours. ( i also added in the flourecent lights to slightly reiterate this)
thats what this is about for me. the realizations made when you least expect them (4am at the Library) in a place that you least expect your emotions to flood the floor at.
but then again, maybe it was just crazy talk

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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer
http://www.onemoredrink.moonfruit.com
First Name Basis is a great, little known band (so far), check out their website

[machinery]

yea, real well put poem..

like the action in it
as hannibal said, the spacing is superb..
it actually has function....

"it is not the early hour or the flourencent lights it is not crazy talk this time"

-this reminded me a lot of ginsberg...or maybe it's the way I read it.

I took it as you were kind of a machine (with making reference to computer)

you became a machine of the night...work'n work'n work'n etc.
and endless process of thought so to speak....

as for ginsberg.....the feeling of yr work, in a way, reflects "Amercia" by him...

you should check it out..


but I ponder yr work...why so many unanswered questions?

get back to me...

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"ashtray says you were up all night."

[sarafinamable]

i never really noticed that trend in my writing until you pointed it out, unanswered questions,
i don't have a concrete answer for that but i do like my writing to pose questions for the reader
i like when i am forced to think or come up with my own answers (when reading other work) and i want to create those same feelings in others
because everything around us is full of unanswered questions; particularly dealing with emotions.
i guess i don't fully understand my own sporatic feelings and i'm trying to through my work, asking questions aloud hoping that will somehow help me grasp an understanding.
this is a confusing reply, sorry.

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"this is life not heaven, you don't have to be perfect."
Gia
"Our love was comfortable and so broken in"
John Mayer
http://www.onemoredrink.moonfruit.com
First Name Basis is a great, little known band (so far), check out their website